Saturday, May 19, 2012

Haven of solitude amongst rising thoughts.


Grandpa clock ticking
Pendulum shadow hovers
My face, a blank screen

Every blink of eye
Seeks haven of solitude 
Amongst rising thoughts

Eternal struggle
Wishing to let life for rent
Heart pines for closure






I have refrained myself from explaining my haiku this time. It's open for interpretation. Leave back your opinion in my comments. I would love to know what idea reached you... whether it's in the same frequency as i wrote. Maybe i'll find another meaning to the same words. Looking forward to the response.


This Haiku is written for the Haiku Heights. The prompt for this week is 'PINE'.



46 comments:

  1. Yes, hearts pine for closure. I can relate to that very well. Lovely set of haiku Pranita. Have a great weekend. See you next week.

    Asni.

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    1. Thanks a lot :) Happy weekend to u too! Cheers!

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  2. But then hearts hope too Prinita.. I find a little sadness here..you wrtie well ..and thanks for your visits to my Masked Poems.. and one more thing.. second one appears one expression..I mean all three lines are making actually one line..see if you can transform it a bit..unless you want the second to be connecting expression to first and third..

    RS:)

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    1. Yes sir... heart hopes too! I haven't explained my haiku this time.. it's open for interpretation.. :)

      Oops! I dint observe the second one making a single expression.. i wrote it in three separate lines, but looks like it turned out to be one whole!
      Thanks a lot! :)

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  3. ...absolutely wonderful, Pranita!

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  4. I feel for your sadness. Your blog took about 10 minutes to open and then refused to scroll down or close, so this is my third attempt to read your poem!

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    1. Awww.. that's so sweet of you... thanks for making so much time to read my haiku.. appreciate it! :)

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  5. Sad and melancholy...I hope the heart finds the closure.

    And I don't think you have to explain what your poem means as it really depends on the reader ~

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  6. The French poet Paul Valéry said:" My verses are enriched by the meaning given to them by my readers…" Here's your enigmatic poem in French!
    Best regards


    L'horloge de grand-père fait tic-tac
    L'ombre du balancier plane
    Mon visage, un écran blanc

    Chaque clin d'œil
    Cherche un havre de solitude
    Parmi les pensées qui émergent

    Eternel combat
    Désirant laisser la vie à louer
    Le cœur se languit de la cloture

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    1. Wow... dat's a beautiful quote! :)
      Thank u so much for the translation! It sounds really beautiful!

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  7. An excellent translation in French - thank you to Claude Lopez Ginitry for sharing it with us - Pranta's readers!!!

    Your verses are always so deep and so true like the life itself! Keep going on this direction! I like it!!!

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    1. Indeed.. I don't understand French.. but someday if i learn the language, m surely gonna come back here n enjoy it :)

      Thanks a lot Diana... M flattered!

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  8. The slow and resonant tick of a grandfather clock relaxes and brings pleasant solitude. Great Haiku.

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  9. I like this a lot, Pranita. I'm glad you left it open to interpretation. I think that adds a lot to the experience.

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    1. Thanks a lot Patti... m really happy with the response! :)

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  10. Certainly, don't explain....I like to feel what each wonderful haiku means to me - yours, Pranita, are always evocative....

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    1. Awww... that's so sweet of you Joanne! Thank u so much :)

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  11. i love the name of ur blog..very motivating, made me smile :) i loved the rythm of melancholy that you created here :)

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    1. Thank you pal.. :) U made me smile with ur comment! :)
      Cheers!

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  12. there is a sadness...and the feel of time slipping as well...nice emotive haiku, i def struggle with the short form...

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    1. Thank you Brian...! Yes... the slipping of tym... the root cause of every thing!

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  13. Trust the 'journey' ~ be in the now and enjoy ~ very contemplative haiku ~ great gets us all thinking ~ thanks, namaste, ^_^

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    1. Yes... true that... trust the journey! Thank u.. :)
      Namaste.

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  14. A sense of lingering deep sadness where a spirit feels helpless to change time, but needs to move on with time! Very moving!

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    1. Well interpreted Gemma... :) U were the closest i can say! Thank you so much..

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  15. after readingg, lot of exoressions I could interpret, from missing grandpa's to missing home to missing closures,. also strong voice of seeking a companion could be heard(lol)!

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    1. Well.. not too close! ;) good try.. hehe...

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  16. Beautiful take on the prompt Pranitha....Beautifully penned :)
    Heart turned stone

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  17. I think, sometimes melancholy enhances the beauty of words. I liked it especially the second one!:)

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  18. Ah! This is pure awesomeness.. the concluding lines touched my heart!

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    1. Ohhh! Thank you Tarun... ur too kind! :)

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  19. Hey its amazing ...
    loved it !!:)

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  20. Why must there be a meaning? American poet Archibald MacLeish, in "Ars Poetica," wrote: "a poem must not mean but be."

    A Pining Peach

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    1. "A poem must not mean but be" -
      Wow.. beautiful words... lines like these are what i live for!

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  21. Every blink of eye
    Seeks haven of solitude
    Amongst rising thoughts

    Nice set of haiku, Pranita! My interpretation of above is built upon an anticipation of many ideas coming to life!

    Hank

    Hank

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    1. Thank you Hank.. Your interpretation is true too :)

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